The "Pink" Cat is "Lavender" Colored. The sprites may eventually need an adjustment/tune up, but for now that is nitpicky, the writing is what the main focus should always be on first and foremost. The sprites, if they are being the focus/conversing with should be moved towards the center, having them at the edges won't do, it makes it feel like they are being ignored. Oliver has no sprite/CG with which we are to know who he is and looks like, nor are we told what his species is.
Aside from this the writing is fine, just some key details that are missing. You could though add in elaboration, even if brief about their walk back to the Campus after that scene, them getting into the dorms, and them splitting up. While they may be curious about the incident, there needs to be a stronger reason provided than to be looking into it on a whim, something more concrete or personal.
Oliver does have a sprite but it will be shown later. The other little details will be fixed. Also, it explains why they decided to investigate, not just out of curiosity but also for justice.
I guess I feel like there needs to be more elaboration on that part. Perhaps the next build will make it feel complete. They had seem to agree a little too easily, but that could be me wanting to be more cautious and thorough. Have to acknowledge the possibilities of what I don't or haven't seen yet.
It is but also when a font is overly stylized, it makes it difficult to read for anything besides titles. Try something like helvetica, something with very little flourish.
Good start~! n_n/ It's nice to find another VN with declarative sentences between the dialogue UwU Tyler & Theodore are best boys, btw~ ;p also, might I suggest increasing the font size?
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Is this game still going to get updated or has it been abandoned
It is not abandoned, I'm just very busy this year because I'm graduating. I was planning to write some more this summer.
ah ok thanks for replying and congratulations on the graduation
You're welcome, also thanks a lot ^^
The "Pink" Cat is "Lavender" Colored. The sprites may eventually need an adjustment/tune up, but for now that is nitpicky, the writing is what the main focus should always be on first and foremost. The sprites, if they are being the focus/conversing with should be moved towards the center, having them at the edges won't do, it makes it feel like they are being ignored. Oliver has no sprite/CG with which we are to know who he is and looks like, nor are we told what his species is.
Aside from this the writing is fine, just some key details that are missing. You could though add in elaboration, even if brief about their walk back to the Campus after that scene, them getting into the dorms, and them splitting up. While they may be curious about the incident, there needs to be a stronger reason provided than to be looking into it on a whim, something more concrete or personal.
Oliver does have a sprite but it will be shown later. The other little details will be fixed. Also, it explains why they decided to investigate, not just out of curiosity but also for justice.
I guess I feel like there needs to be more elaboration on that part. Perhaps the next build will make it feel complete. They had seem to agree a little too easily, but that could be me wanting to be more cautious and thorough. Have to acknowledge the possibilities of what I don't or haven't seen yet.
It will make more sense later.
Please change the font in the game or allow an option for open dyslexic for accessibility.
Is it too small?
It is but also when a font is overly stylized, it makes it difficult to read for anything besides titles. Try something like helvetica, something with very little flourish.
Alright we will take care of this.
Good start~! n_n/ It's nice to find another VN with declarative sentences between the dialogue UwU Tyler & Theodore are best boys, btw~ ;p also, might I suggest increasing the font size?
Thanks a lot for the compliments ^^ I'm glad you like my characters already. We'll see what we can do about the font in the next update.
Oh cool i'm italian
Cool :)
cool